论点非常关键,它直接决定了你这篇作文好写不好写,“what extent do you agree or disagree? ”常常看见这样的句子吧,这是出题者给考生的一个陷阱,你要是自己在这件事上的意见飘忽不定,无非是给你自己挖了个大坑,除非你本身功力深厚,要不。。呵呵 文章难写了,你70%同意,30%不同意,同意里面夹杂着不同意,最后再综合,怎么综合啊,你写作能力不强的话连自己都说服不了,怎么去说服考官啊。分数肯定高不了。
文章的题目一般都能改成你作文的第一句,换言之,第一句就是现实的概况+题目的改写,打个比方:
Children who grow up in families which are short of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children who are brought up by wealthy parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
文章开头第一段 分3部分3-4句 句1写现状, 句2-3把题目改头换面, 句4写明自己立场
还是这篇文章,你就可以这么写:可能有错哦,别偷笑
Nowadays, a large number of (多用这个词代替many,因为有4个单词好凑字数) people begin to realise the significance(比用importance正规书面) of education(现状). They are more and more focusing on the family environment that they offer to their kids(有从句了,在重点枝干部分,少用简单句,多用复杂句). Some parents believe children in wealthy(最好用另一个表示富有的词代替,rich又太口语化,就用它了) families will have better education, while(多用,巧用while,可美化文章结构,从两
个简单句变成一个复杂句) some suppose(不用believe,相同的词考官会认为你词汇量有限没水平) the problems which are caused by shorting of money help children to build up the ability to improve their situations(题目的改写,别抄题目中的单词和句式,要不抄的这句人家不给你分的,用另一个方式写,主动变被动,简单换复杂). In my opinion, children who live in rich families will grow up better than the kids in poor families. 站明立场,下面三段都是为这句话服务了。
这样你的开头就开完了,绝对6分的开头,你水平再好点的话就是7分卷的水平了。
评分标准二中说的“交流质量”就是 中间的每个观点了,说每个观点的时候不要都是firstly,secondly,thirdly。。看上去像小学生作文,第一第二第三,清楚是很清楚,没水平。要像领导说话那样,用首先,其次,再次,另外,最后。。。 我用的都是“Most important of all”,“In addition”,“Last but not least”分别表示首先其次最后的,百试百爽,大小通吃。
按我的经验,观点部分每段第一句要精写,后面的都是树叶部分,不要太花时间在上面。
第一个观点的第一句建议用 “名言” 比如一分耕耘一分收获 you heap what you sow,对孩子的教育有高投入才能有高产出 什么的 所以你要记一些这些类似的说法。去论坛上下载一些谚语读读,记忆二三十句就够用了。再可以说到什么到好的学校学费高,学钢琴学费贵,都需要钱,穷人家的孩子cannot afford这类的充实you heap what you sow的观点,这些后面的树叶部分就可以for exaple,for instance, such as 什么什么的自己加了如果想不出话来的话(第一个观点的树叶部分比2,3观点的枝叶部分重要,不要写太差)
第二个观点我都是用强调句式
As...当前情况或者原因....it's important(valid) that ...后加(should) +动词原形 (should可以省略)
在强调句前还可以加上As或者since,表示原因的,让句子更完整。注意后面的从句全部用动词原形。
我就背了一个句子 是关于要乘着全球年轻要互相学习的观点
As the world become a global village, it's important(valid上语言的时候鬼说这个词更好 意思更强烈) that our neighbors and we be(注意是动词原形be前的should省略了) open minded and learn from each other.
同上,后面的树叶部分就可以for exaple,for instance, such as 什么什么的自己加了如果想不出话来的话
同上,后面的树叶部分就可以for exaple,for instance, such as 什么什么的自己加了如果想不出话来的话
1.Only the selfless can be fearless.
无私者才能无畏。
2.Only the person who has faith in himself is able to be faithful to others.
只有对自己有信念的人才能对别人守信用。
3.Only by working hard can we reap a bumper harvest.
只有通过辛勤劳动才能收获丰硕的成果。
4.Only by showing your sincerity can you win the confidence of your friends.
只有通过表现诚意才能赢得朋友的信任。
5.Only by knowing yourself can you hope to become an effective leader.
只有通过了解自己才有希望成为一位优秀领导者。
6.Only with laughter and happiness can I truly become a success.
只有伴随着笑声和幸福我才能真正成为成功者。
7.Only if you develop good listening skills early will you be able to gather the information you need to succeed.
只有当早些掌握良好的倾听技能才能收集到你成功所需要的信息。
8.Only those who have the patience to do simple things perfectly ever acquire the skill to do difficult things easily.
只有那些有耐心把简单事情做得完善的人才能学会技能把复杂事情做得容易。
9.Only when one plunges into the powerful current of times will one’s life shine brilliantly.
一个人只有投身于时代的伟大洪流,她的生命才会闪耀光彩。
10.Only if you have been in the deepest valley can you ever know how magnificent it is to be on the highest mountain.
只有走过最深的低谷才能体会到站在高山之巅的辉煌。
In conclusion(这个我感觉最正式,比therefore, To sum up,in a word 好), I strongly(增加气势自己给自己加筹码壮胆)believe the children growing up by wealthy parents will prepare better for the future since they get better education than the children in poor family.